Thursday, April 21, 2011

Why me ?

I wanna end this relationship,
Feels like I'm in a battleship.
On my face, you
slammed that door.
Do I really look so poor?

Wanna end it,
as its not worth it.
Do feel anything,
something,
That feeling is called
Pain.

Didn't I give enough time,
attention, care.
But you treated me like,
as if you don't care.

I wanna end this relationship,
Feels like I'm in a battleship.
On my face, you
slammed that door.
Do I really look so poor?
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23 comments:

  1. Red HandedApril 21, 2011 at 7:15 PM

    Nice one!!!
    Simple but expresses it all.

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  2. Raghavendra MuttApril 21, 2011 at 7:17 PM

    @ Red Handed: Thank you for being the first to read & commenting..:D

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  3. AnonymousApril 21, 2011 at 9:04 PM

    I can feel the pain. Great write :)

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  4. Raghavendra MuttApril 21, 2011 at 9:09 PM

    @ bendedspoon: Thank you..:D

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  5. AnonymousApril 22, 2011 at 12:35 AM

    good one.. my thursday post : http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/20/me-before-us/

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  6. AnonymousApril 22, 2011 at 2:18 AM

    Dear me! :-D Hope things turn out better in the next relationship!

    Seriously, it is a fun poem - short, sweet, evocative, and gets the point across efficiently! Good job!

    Here's mine:
    http://paulatohlinecalhoun1951.wordpress.com/2011/04/21/lines/

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  7. AlcinaApril 22, 2011 at 6:31 AM

    Naiceee...You know i tried to make it go with the sound of Love the way you lie..it matches..try out ;)

    Don't ask Why me..say try me :)

    Alcina

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  8. AnonymousApril 22, 2011 at 11:12 AM

    End it!And this time,YOU slam the door! Loved it :)

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  9. Raghavendra MuttApril 22, 2011 at 11:37 AM

    @ fiveloaf : Thank you..
    @ paulatohlinecalhoun1951: Well, thank you.. I have never been in a relationship, so not sure..:D
    @ Alcina : Is it really..? Wow..!
    @ carefreewanderer : Lol..! Thank you for the suggestion..!

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  10. Hyde Park Poetry PalaceApril 22, 2011 at 5:42 PM

    beautiful...
    welcome and enjoy the fun.

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  11. Raghavendra MuttApril 22, 2011 at 5:57 PM

    @ Promising Poets Parking Lot: Thank you..

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  12. Vinay Leo R.April 23, 2011 at 2:57 AM

    very lyrical, Raghu.. somewhat reminded me of Linkin Park! :)

    My Post Is Here

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  13. Raghavendra MuttApril 23, 2011 at 3:10 AM

    @ Vinay: Yo thnx man.. U comparin me wiit Linkin park, tht feels gr8..!

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  14. Misha GerrickApril 23, 2011 at 9:05 AM

    Is the poem a work of fiction, or is it something you're really going through?

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  15. Raghavendra MuttApril 24, 2011 at 10:30 AM

    @ Misha: pure fiction.. I hav never been into a relationship to xperience all this..:-) thnx 4 readin..

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  16. Duncan D. Horne - the Kuantan bloggerApril 25, 2011 at 12:45 AM

    I was a little concerned about you until I saw your comment above! Nicely written!

    Duncan In Kuantan

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  17. Raghavendra MuttApril 25, 2011 at 3:11 AM

    @ Dunncan: thnx..:-)

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  18. nutschellApril 25, 2011 at 8:19 PM

    well you captured the feelings nicely.Great meeting you through the A-Z!
    nutschell
    www.thewritingnut.com

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  19. Raghavendra MuttApril 25, 2011 at 8:29 PM

    @ nutschell: Thank you.. means a lot..

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  20. PurbaApril 26, 2011 at 11:28 PM

    So did you finally end it?

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  21. Raghavendra MuttApril 26, 2011 at 11:33 PM

    @ Purba: never been in a relationship.. Its a fiction.. Thnx 4 stoppin BTW..

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  22. Paul MullinApril 29, 2011 at 6:37 AM

    Simple, to the point, pretty much explains it all. Nicely captured.

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  23. Raghavendra MuttApril 29, 2011 at 11:40 AM

    @ Paul Mullin : Thank you..:D

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