Thursday, April 21, 2011

Why me ?

I wanna end this relationship,
Feels like I'm in a battleship.
On my face, you
slammed that door.
Do I really look so poor?

Wanna end it,
as its not worth it.
Do feel anything,
something,
That feeling is called
Pain.

Didn't I give enough time,
attention, care.
But you treated me like,
as if you don't care.

I wanna end this relationship,
Feels like I'm in a battleship.
On my face, you
slammed that door.
Do I really look so poor?

23 comments:

  1. Nice one!!!
    Simple but expresses it all.

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  2. @ Red Handed: Thank you for being the first to read & commenting..:D

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  3. I can feel the pain. Great write :)

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  4. @ bendedspoon: Thank you..:D

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  5. good one.. my thursday post : http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/20/me-before-us/

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  6. Dear me! :-D Hope things turn out better in the next relationship!

    Seriously, it is a fun poem - short, sweet, evocative, and gets the point across efficiently! Good job!

    Here's mine:
    http://paulatohlinecalhoun1951.wordpress.com/2011/04/21/lines/

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  7. Naiceee...You know i tried to make it go with the sound of Love the way you lie..it matches..try out ;)

    Don't ask Why me..say try me :)

    Alcina

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  8. End it!And this time,YOU slam the door! Loved it :)

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  9. @ fiveloaf : Thank you..
    @ paulatohlinecalhoun1951: Well, thank you.. I have never been in a relationship, so not sure..:D
    @ Alcina : Is it really..? Wow..!
    @ carefreewanderer : Lol..! Thank you for the suggestion..!

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  10. @ Promising Poets Parking Lot: Thank you..

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  11. very lyrical, Raghu.. somewhat reminded me of Linkin Park! :)

    My Post Is Here

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  12. @ Vinay: Yo thnx man.. U comparin me wiit Linkin park, tht feels gr8..!

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  13. Is the poem a work of fiction, or is it something you're really going through?

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  14. @ Misha: pure fiction.. I hav never been into a relationship to xperience all this..:-) thnx 4 readin..

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  15. I was a little concerned about you until I saw your comment above! Nicely written!

    Duncan In Kuantan

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  16. well you captured the feelings nicely.Great meeting you through the A-Z!
    nutschell
    www.thewritingnut.com

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  17. @ nutschell: Thank you.. means a lot..

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  18. @ Purba: never been in a relationship.. Its a fiction.. Thnx 4 stoppin BTW..

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  19. Simple, to the point, pretty much explains it all. Nicely captured.

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  20. @ Paul Mullin : Thank you..:D

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